Author's Note: I created this piece to inform people on how music is important. Also, to challenge myself to start the sentences with different words.
Music is a very important element in life. It can touch the world in many ways. Everyone should be a part of music in someway, because it has an effect on everyone's life.
When you are in a certain mood and you just want to let it out or forget about it, music can help you with that. If you're really mad about something, make up a song and express yourself. Or, when you're sad and you've had a really rough day you can calm down and listen to you're iPod.
Also, when you make with other people you can get to know them and make more friends. That's why orchestra, band, and choir are great activities to be a part of. People can see the real you when you make music. When, make music together you are friends until you stop.
Teamwork is another reason why music is so incredible. Everyone and everything counts when you make music. One alone can do so much, but when you all work together, you get a bigger and better outcome. The beat of a drum is hardly anything, but when you add the clarinets, flutes, violins, and voices, it takes everything and brings it to a whole new level.
This is why I think that music is such an important part of life. I don't think there's anyone that shouldn't love music, because life would be nothing without it. Music is everything.
Nice job! I liked how you gave scenarios and other examples. Also how you included your opinion and experiences. I did see some grammar errors though, but nothing that would interfere with your writing. Great job sister!
ReplyDeleteWell constructed essay. I like how you have a strong intro. and incorporate excellent organization. Look to include more developed paragraphs. Also, avoid starting a sentence with coordinating conjunction.
ReplyDeleteI think that you had a good way of letting people know that music is an important part of life.
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